The 23 seconds that you have here sound pretty awesome, but o\it doesn't really work as a standalone loop. Really sounds like an awesome builldup, and I must say that I was a bit disappointed to find out that the track is only 23 seconds long. You should really try develop this further and make it into a full song.
I also found the snare sample to be a bit too flat. Maybe add some reverb or delay to it?.
This sounds really good, but could really use some more :).
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